So what would be the question you are asking? if you're asking how to hook a reader in your intro start with an onomatopoeia or something like: On a dark and stormy night Elle Mist sat in the corner of her room crying wondering when her parents would come home.
Answer:
I dont have time to read the entire thing, but it would make sense (i skimmed it) if the answer was
B)
Explanation:
It makes the most sense. but i may be wrong possibly but probably not :)
Answer:
I was given a bang on the head by someone.
