Feedback:
I think your descriptions are great! I like the way you describe the setting and how it makes the observer feel with extreme detail. I was able to picture everything really well in my head. Moving forwards, I think what you should do is reassess what you're writing about. Maybe I misunderstood what you meant by <em>"describing a moutain," </em>but I feel that you spent too much time talking about the overall setting and how it made the observer feel instead of the actual mountain. I liked your description of the mountain being "a beast arisen from nowhere; its tip to be unseen" and I think you should continue this as you'll prevent yourself from drifting too far from the object of interest.
Answer:
Athletes Take Time Away from Study to Play Sports. ...
Sports Take as Much Time as A Full-time Job. ...
Explanation:
This is a very sound essay! I’d say read it out loud to someone you know and see if they also have feedback but really the only thing I can recommend is some smoother transitions
