It’s the last one because it shows more details like shallow breath and don’t dont
A writer can read it out loud, paying attention to every sound and word. Or give the piece of writing to someone else in order to be objective.
(Sorry some words may be different as it is in British English and I prefer writing in it)
Introduction by Mimiwhatsup:Over 500 students came to the Mason High School football team's game where they won the state championship. The two final teams Sutter High and Mason High played a controversial game. The weather outside was 32 degrees outside. Both teams played a hard game Mason High travelled 60 miles to the game. So that they could be the high school football team.
Body Paragraph: First, when Mason High School won it was the very first championship they ever won. This game was played on Monday, December 1st on a cold winter day but that was no matter to the football teams. The two teams were wearing red and yellow with a scoreboard of 56-34 to the very end. The teams' quarterbacks or seniors were prepared and ready to meet and play. Mason High School was declared the winner at the end for a specific high score of 56 and became their very first team to win at their school in championships.
<span>The characterization technique which the author used in the excerpt is indirect characterization. With the use of this technique, readers can get to know the character through his actions and speech. There is no direct hint as description of appearance so readers themselves reveal character's personality.</span>
It reflects what people did in the 1860 and 1900s talking about what they did to live
