Question

Draft Model Once there was a princess who lived in a castle. She was tired of climbing stairs. She asked her father for a platform she could stand on that would carry her from floor to floor. Today we call it an elevator. A. Read the draft model. Use the questions that follow the draft to help you think about what descriptive details you can add. 1. When and where does this story take place? 2. Whatdescriptivedetailscanbeaddedtohelpthereadervisualizethe princess? 3. Whywastheprincesstiredofclimbingstairs? 4. Whatdescriptivedetailscouldprovidemoreinformationabouttheelevator? B. Now revise the draft by adding descriptive details that create a clearer picture of the princess, her father, and the elevator.

Answer 1

1. The story takes place in the medival age in a castle.
2. She had short brown hair, crystal blue eyes, and wore a bright spring green dress.
3. She was tired of climbing stairs because there are so many of them.
4. The elevator would be a sturdy wooden platform that would be raised by a rope that had to be pulled by a servant or the person on the elevator.
5. Once, in a castle far away, there was a gorgeous princess with short brown hair and crystal blue eyes. She had to climb many long stairs just to get anywhere. She grew tired of carying them and decided to go to her father and address the situation. She pleaded for a platform that would carry her to any floor. It was a good idea and spread worldwide into now what we call an elevator.