Question

Please tell me what I need to improve and how to improve it also tell me what I should put for my conclusion. Thank you!

Answer 1

This sounds pretty good actually!

Answer 2

Capitalize Lawrence and Juliet in the first paragraph. Other than that, it's a pretty solid introduction.

In the second paragraph, make sure to close the quotation that you started on "deny thy father..."
-Capitalize Capulet since it's a last name.
-Change Romeos to Romeo's
-Again, close quotations "I gave thy mine.."

The rest of the writing is fine, just be sure to capitalize things and close quotations. :)