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Could someone do a grammar check on this rough draft so far? and if i made any grammar mistakes tell me the problems and how i can fix them. Thanks.
There are many things for families to do in Ohio! People can go to Cedar Point, go to the Rock and Roll Hall of Fame, and sporting events such as the Cleveland Cavs and The Cleveland Indians! Let’s learn about the Rock and Roll Hall of Fame. “The Rock and Roll Hall of Fame was made by I.M Pei in 1986”. What the Rock and Roll Hall of Fame it was a museum of famous people who have sang, and made music throughout the years. The famous people in the museum have unfortunately died. Some people who are in the rock and roll hall of fame are: Ahmet Ertegun who died in 1987, Al Green who died in 1995, Alan Freed who died in 1986, The Animals who died in 1994, And B.B King who died in 1987.

Now let’s talk about Cedar Point! Cedar Point was made by George Boeckling in 1897. Cedar Point is a roller coaster park that has a lot of rides, it has Tons of Food, and there is a Water Park too! The current roller coasters they have right now are: Millennium Force, Maverick, The Mantis, and my three favorite roller coasters are, The Iron Dragon, Corkscrew, and the Mine Ride. They have lots of games and you can win prizes from them! It would be a fun place for your family to go to.

Answer 1

       I went through and fixed what I thought might need a little changing, I didn't see much wrong at all though, good job! ^w^

       There are many things for families to do in Ohio! People can go to Cedar Point, the Rock and Roll Hall of Fame, and sporting events such as the Cleveland Cavs and The Cleveland Indians! Let’s learn about the Rock and Roll Hall of Fame. “The Rock and Roll Hall of Fame was made by I.M Pei in 1986”. The Rock and Roll Hall of Fame is a museum of famous people who have sang, and made music throughout the years. The famous people in the museum have unfortunately passed. Some people who are in the Rock and Roll Hall of Fame are: Ahmet Ertegun who died in 1987, Al Green who died in 1995, Alan Freed who died in 1986, The Animals who died in 1994, And B.B King who died in 1987.

        Now let’s talk about Cedar Point! Cedar Point was made by George Boeckling in 1897. Cedar Point is a roller coaster park that has a lot of rides, it has Tons of Food, and there is a Water Park too! The current roller coasters they have right now are: Millennium Force, Maverick, The Mantis, and my three favorite roller coasters are, The Iron Dragon, Corkscrew, and the Mine Ride. They have lots of games and you can win prizes from them! It would be a fun place for your family to go to!

Answer 2

I think when you said "famous people who have sang" it should be "sung", but that's about it. Good job! :)