Question

Rewrite the sentences below to increase sentence variety and then explain your revisions.

Answer 1

Answer: Tasha and Angelo have both always wanted to invent things. While Tasha is interested in robots, Angelo is intrigued by aircraft, and both plan to pursue college. This will help fuel their dreams to be successful innovators in the future.

Explanation: The original sentences were simple declarative sentences that could easily be combined, which made for a bland, choppy paragraph. When some of the sentences are combined and subtly rewritten, the excerpt becomes more interesting and easy to read.