Question

Which statement should be revised for a more formal tone? Poseidon, god of the sea, and Athena, goddess of war, fought for the city of Athens. Poseidon threw his spear, which produced the Spring of Acropolis. Amaltheia was kind of like a goat who fed Zeus, which Zeus was really happy about. In fact, he turned the goat’s horn into the horn of plenty. Chronos was the ancient Greek symbol of time. His appearance, a wise old man with a long beard, is similar to a current symbol, Father Time. Sisyphus displeased the gods by disclosing secrets. He found himself forced to roll a heavy stone uphill, only to see it roll back once it reached the peak.

Answer 1

Answer:

The statement which should be revised for a more formal tone is the following one:

Amaltheia was kind of like a goat who fed Zeus, which Zeus was really happy about.

Explanation:

It sounds way too informal, and there is a familiarity tone which should be avoided when one wants to sound formal.

"Kind of like" and "was really happy about" sound like coming from a chat between close friends, so they are inappropriate if a more formal tone is sought. Therefore, the aforementioned statement is the one which should be revised for a more formal tone.

Answer 2

The third sentence. It sounds clumsy - like you are talking to a friend, just "chillin'".