"Hard work would always yield results, as proved by our predecessors. A few notable figures to mention would be Thomas Edison and the Wright brothers, Wilbur and Orville. Studying also conforms to this concept."
You can use this as an opening.
"A spotted shaft is seen" is alliteration because the letter S is repeated 3 times at the beginning of 3 words, which are spotted, shaft, and seen.
To fix the sentence, change "," after 2004 to ";" and remove the "and" before scientists. It makes the sentence sound better.
I hope that helps!
I would say that poetry is a way of expressing your emotions in words.