Read the excerpt from “Pakistan’s Malala.” "I was in a bad mood," Malala blogged. Vacation was normally fun but no one was in th
e mood to celebrate. But what do you do when you're 11? You go to the playground and you play, so that's what they did. Some of the girls said they thought everything would work out. They'd be back, they said. Malala wanted to be hopeful, too. But before she left, she turned around and took one long look at the building. Malala was right about the edict and what it meant. Which statement best describes Malala’s viewpoint? Which statement best describes Malala’s viewpoint? She was angry that others did not understand the meaning of the school’s closing. She was in agreement with the other girls that the school would be reopened. She was disappointed, because her school was likely closed permanently. She was optimistic that her school would reopen after vacation ended.
You changed the type of narration in the first sentence you said you were Lizzy and in the second sentence you were story telling third person.
The better way to word the second sentence is: 'Lizzy was a senior in high school and had been thinking about going to Harvard university but then plans changed however not for the better.'
You can try to find more complicated words to make the text more interesting.
