Tim has prepared the following thesis statement for his essay on Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet: Although Juliet’s actions may b
e interpreted as rushed and immature, she is capable of making mature, rational decisions. Which of these lines spoken by Juliet in the play support the thesis statement? How camest thou hither, tell me, and wherefore? The orchard walls are high and hard to climb, And the place death, considering who thou art, If any of my kinsmen find thee here. Thou know'st the mask of night is on my face, Else would a maiden blush bepaint my cheek I have no joy of this contract to-night: It is too rash, too unadvised, too sudden; Too like the lightning, which doth cease to be How art thou out of breath, when thou hast breath To say to me that thou art out of breath? The excuse that thou dost make in this delay Is longer than the tale thou dost excuse.
I like the line beginning. "The Orchard walls ... " She is observing her circumstances and concluding that if her kinsmen catch him, he is literally dead meat. That does not sound like a thirteen going on fourteen year old girl.
You could pick "Thou knowest the mask of night is on my face ... " she knows how she would react if someone actually saw her in the night. I like this one but would choose the one above it.
The last one shows her being a little annoyed. Just a little. I like her spunk.
Appeal to the sense of sight only (how things look) and your writing will lack ... We can also use those words to describe how things feel, smell and taste, too. ... Don't attempt to paint the full picture, describing every tree and building and passing ... I didn't write those sentences descriptively, like I would have done in a novel.
