Question

Read the beginning of George’s personal narrative. 1.Sue worked at the local grocery store. 2.She was in charge of stocking the shelves. 3. She had to arrive at work before daylight, so she could work in the food aisles before the first customers arrived. What problem needs to be fixed in George’s narrative?

Answer 1

Well i think its C.) George needs to add a time relationship between sentences 1 and 2. But you better add the options next time.

Answer 2

One of the problems is that the sentences are too simple, there is no complexity in them. Changing up the sentence type would help it flow better. Also, he starts every sentence with 'Sue' or 'she', which needs to be varied in order to make the piece more interesting than it currently is.