Answer:
It's very beautiful and passionate!
Tips:
-you put "once you get to the top" twice so try changing or deleting the second one.
-some common grammar mistakes (capitalize, correct spots for commas/periods, etc).
-try not to use "etc" in your writing.
-you spelled "realize" as relies
Other than those the story was good!! :)
1. The truck tumbled down the street rapidly.
2. The man drudged home from a day of work sadly.
It said I could add my own choice of adjectives or adverbs after the sentences and so, I did just that. I hope this helps!
When needing advice about something. Like if someone watched their mom get hit by a friend. The one that watched their mom get hit should be able to talk to a friend about what to do next.
