Answer:
Even though this question is missing the options, after analyzing the revision we can safely say it was made for <u>conciseness</u>.
Explanation:
Conciseness can be simply defined as saying a lot in just a few words. Notice how the original paragraph is much longer than the revised one. The writer gave much more information than what was truly necessary. Details such as "and that new procedures need to be initiated" and "who was sympathetic" are superfluous. The first one adds nothing of value. If the procedures are inadequate, it is quite obvious that new ones need to be initiated. Readers could infer that. The second one is permeated with subjectivity, not only making the paragraph longer, but also stating an opinion that in uncalled for in this context. By eliminating the extra words, the writer made the paragraph concise, using fewer words to express the necessary.
I got one called the voyager
The twin Voyager 1 and 2 spacecraft are exploring where nothing from Earth has flown before. Continuing on their more-than-40-year journey since their 1977 launches, they each are much farther away from Earth and the sun than Pluto. In August 2012, Voyager 1 made the historic entry into interstellar space, the region between stars, filled with material ejected by the death of nearby stars millions of years ago. Voyager 2 entered interstellar space on November 5, 2018 and scientists hope to learn more about this region. Both spacecraft are still sending scientific information about their surroundings through the Deep Space Network, or DSN.
The primary mission was the exploration of Jupiter and Saturn. After making a string of discoveries there — such as active volcanoes on Jupiter's moon Io and intricacies of Saturn's rings — the mission was extended. Voyager 2 went on to explore Uranus and Neptune, and is still the only spacecraft to have visited those outer planets. The adventurers' current mission, the Voyager Interstellar Mission (VIM), will explore the outermost edge of the Sun's domain. And beyond.
Because Claudius was very untrustworthy.
Answer:
I once got kicked by a horse
Explanation:
This is the only really interesting fact about myself anyways have a nice day/night :)
<span>The correct answer is D stick to your subject. By sticking to your subject, you will essentially be writing with the purpose of upholding your thesis, or argument, which is the most important aspect of a paper. Option A is incorrect because this depends on the piece you're writing. For example, if you're writing a short story, then a description based on one of your senses would be excellent imagery. However, if you're writing an argument paper, it would be better to offer a description based on reputable sources. B and C are both incorrect, because you will want to include relevant details. You shouldn't take away details that would support your thesis, and you shouldn't add irrelevant details that would take away from your argument.</span>
