1answer.
Ask question
Login Signup
Ask question
All categories
  • English
  • Mathematics
  • Social Studies
  • Business
  • History
  • Health
  • Geography
  • Biology
  • Physics
  • Chemistry
  • Computers and Technology
  • Arts
  • World Languages
  • Spanish
  • French
  • German
  • Advanced Placement (AP)
  • SAT
  • Medicine
  • Law
  • Engineering
Aleks04 [339]
3 years ago
5

Can someone read over my story and let me know about errors? My teacher wants a personal essay and these are parts of my life ov

er the past couple years. Thanks!
(For those who are in my hangouts inbox, I didn't mean to but I whipped out my account last night without knowing, so I need your emails again.)


About two years ago, December 2016. I can remember it clear as day, my parents were having a distribute but I didn't know what it was about. The morning after, I had found out that mom had cheated on dad with another guy! When this was found out I was scared, depressed, stressed, etc. When I finally met who she was seeing I couldn't believe my eyes!

She was seeing one of the richest people in South Carolina! I got so mad. My first though was, "Did mom leave dad for someone with money?". With this though running in my head I was furious. I couldn't believe my eyes, what was I seeing?

Then around June, I moved in with this "Boyfriend" of hers. Come to find out he's abusive and likes to mistreat people when under his roof in his house. I would come home to my mom crying with broken bones and/or brusies. I got so upset...my dad never done this! I don't know how to handle it. (I didn't handle it well).

The fights grew and grew and finally, I was done, I felt done. I mentally couldn't do it. I then locked myself in the bathroom looking at myself in the mirror crying...."what have I done?" I have a pill bottle open in-front of me, ready for me to take all pills and just die. And that's exactly what I did.

August 12th my birthday of last year, I woke up in the hospital and learned my lungs and kidney collasped on me. I had a kidney transplant and was hooked up to a stablizer. (For those who don't know what a stabalizer is, it is a tube that goes into your mouth to give you oxygen.) I wasn't breathing on my own...

It's sad how one can think about take their own life without realizing the harm that they've done. I've learned my lesson...
English
2 answers:
BartSMP [9]3 years ago
6 0

you put "through" instead of "thought" in the 3rd paragraph in the 3rd sentence

tensa zangetsu [6.8K]3 years ago
3 0
I don't see anything wrong with it. and all those things really happened???
You might be interested in
What features are shared by both poetic language and a poem?
jarptica [38.1K]

Answer:

Both have the same rhyme scheme.

Explanation:

6 0
2 years ago
Read 2 more answers
Which of the following statements about American Romanticism is not true? 1)Romanticism originated in British Literature and mig
Tatiana [17]
2 transcendentalism and gothic short stories are of american romanticism
5 0
2 years ago
Read 2 more answers
E
katovenus [111]
Answer D I believe. It is but I never know
7 0
3 years ago
Ive asked so many times so just plzz answer these are my last points
Nataly [62]

Answer:

there is like 6 questions in this questions i dont want to say some wrong

Explanation:

8 0
3 years ago
Read 2 more answers
Based on your reading of Act 1 of Julius Caesar, to Who is the character of Cassius most loyal?
Wittaler [7]
The answer is C !!!!!!!!!
6 0
2 years ago
Read 2 more answers
Other questions:
  • I live in close proximity to pro player stadium. the sentence above should be revised into
    8·1 answer
  • Correct the sentence by selecting the proper pronoun usage.
    11·1 answer
  • A coordinate ajective is
    15·2 answers
  • Based on this excerpt and on roosevelt's speech, what would MacArthur most likely sau about america
    15·1 answer
  • The next question refers to This Mystery Rocks! by Cynthia Schlagel.
    9·2 answers
  • What are the two ways to properly cite sources when using MLA style?
    15·1 answer
  • “We went tiptoeing along a path amongst the trees back towards the end of the widow's garden, stooping down so as the branches w
    14·2 answers
  • Use your knowledge about the advantages of international trade to complete each
    7·1 answer
  • How does the mood change when the Whites go to bed? What words does
    10·1 answer
  • PLEASE HELP:I NEED NOTAIONS FOR CHAPTER 1-4 FOR THE BOOK:THE GIVER.PLEASE HELP AND ILL BRAINLIST
    11·1 answer
Add answer
Login
Not registered? Fast signup
Signup
Login Signup
Ask question!