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In this situation you would want to send this screenshot to your teacher because this question is broken, the underlined part is the name of the excerpt which would not work with the question. I've had to do this myself plenty of times in K12 because no one checked question before they go to students. :/
The tense is all mixed up, but it looks like present is used most often, so "emitted" should be changed to "emits" and "pulled" should be changed to "pulls." I can't see the entire paragraph so just make sure that's consistent.
You don't need a comma in "running towards us with the fire extinguisher."
"Your mother and me" should be "Your mother and I." For reference try taking our "your mother" - it sounds pretty silly to say "me thinks" unless you're in the 1600s, right? And it should be "think" instead of "thinks."
<span>In Golding's "The Lord of the Flies," Ralph sought to recreate the order and function of that they left behind in the civilized world, while Jack began to enjoy the power and savagery the island's location allowed. During the meeting where Jack challenged Ralph, Ralph held the meeting at dusk, when it was getting dark, and when Jack had returned from a successful--and brutal--pig hunt. The dark's diminishing of Ralph's authority coupled with Jack's sense of savage power gave Jack the sense of power to challenge Ralph. He used fear of the dark to influence the smaller boys to his side.</span>
