First, <em>the animals value freedom.</em>They are not free, they respond to the requirements of human beings and all the decisions in the farm are not for them to make, they do not have a saying at anything connected to them.
Second, <em>The animals value a profit.</em>Whatever they do, they do it for the benefit of humans , not for themselves .They deserve to get some profit from what they do or from what thet are to the farm.They see how human beings take advantage of them and they get nothing in return.They value profit.
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People brave enough to explore new territory face great risks. An event as tragic as this makes one call into question whether to continue on with these explorations. The nation cannot let grief hold itself back from carrying on with people's regular routines.
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Once there was a greedy boy in a village. He always wanted to have more food and fruits. One day, hw was hungry and moved here and there is search of food in the house. Hw met a jar full of nuts. He wanted to have them. The neck of jar was very narrow. Hw opened his hand and kept his hand into the jar. After putting his hand in the jar, he tried to take the handful nuts. He tried to put his hand out of the jar but couldn't because it was full of nuts. He couldn't realize that the neck of jar was very narrow. He got hurried because he wanted to have some before his mother came. But unfortunately, his mother arrived immediately. He got afraid as he saw her. He was also scared that his hands were trapped. He started crying. She watched him deeply and told him not to cry. She explained him the reason. He understood why he couldn't keep his hand out of the jar. He followed the instructions given by his mother and kept his hand out of the jar. Finally, he realized his mistake.
Moral: Greed causes suffering
<span>He never harms people, unless they try to enter my dominions without being sent for, or to get away when I wish to keep them here.
This sentence indicates what the conflict will involve so it contributes the most.</span>
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If you want the honest feedback, I got you. I was really good, but I have a few suggestions to make it sound more "official":
- Italicize sounds (i.e. change "Thud!" to <em>Thud. </em>in the second paragraph)
- Make sure formatting is reasonable and consistent: "1 month later" is too big, the title should be bigger and "Beanbag" is incorrect (it's bean bag)
- Suspense would work very well in this story. I wouldn't reveal who the speaker is until the last paragraph or even last sentence. To do this, you can touch more on the emotional aspects of this story in the introduction and body paragraphs (no naming names, places, things, etc.) Make it abstract as you can to build up to the answers: Who is talking? What happened to them? Why do they feel this way? Things like that.
- Stop being so repetitive with words like "demon" (maybe substitute for "little devil" or "menace")
- I see the humorous aspect of this story, but I would make sure to not include too many spelling and grammar mistakes.
Sorry if my suggestions are a little too intense, but I can tell you are a good writer and can easily improve in these areas! Please let me know if this helps!
