I believe that you should just check your spelling , capitalize some I's and the word January .
You should also give more detail about the Sunday event.
When you say the word conclusion I begin to think about a short paragraph / summary , this means you should bring the reader in , draw my attention to your mint idea.
I really hope that I'm helping you , :)
I wasn’t sure how to properly answer the question which later developed into my failure of the quiz.
The silence of the lambs i think
