In general you want to be a bit more concise in forming a thesis statement. Usually you should shoot for between 1 and 2 sentences summarizing your argument in a concise way so that it is easily understandable to the reader. I would take what you have written and look for your main argument and try and put that in 1 to 2 sentences.
Answer:
nxkdodkekoeke ie dis idnsidje hajj e nd e nd sad d
Explanation:
hd7d dudbhd did HD dud dude dude guy ychdhe
Answer:
Darry is hard on him but only because he wants the best from ponyboy and more. Sometimes he doesn't mean to do it intentionally and yells at him. That would really show why they don't get along.
Hope it helps and have a great day! =D
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