<h2>Hello! ☻</h2><h3>I would give you an overall 9/10</h3>
I gave you that rating because some things could improve. Not bashing your work, but just adding in some friendly advise :)
- Transition Words
Just from viewing your writing and seeing how you have combined your ideas and information, your transition words stuck out like a sore thumb :/. In simplest terms, the transition words you used ('First of all...', 'Secondly...', 'Thirdly...', 'In conclusion...') came off just a little bit bland. Don't panic, this could be easily fixed! :) Just add a little "<em>spice" </em>to your transitions ('To start off...', 'in addition...', 'Nevertheless...'. 'To conclude my thoughts...').
2. Elaboration
This wasn't <em>that </em>much of a big deal, but most certainly deserved to be up on this list. Everyone likes to read interesting books and writings that pop with entertainment, but no one prefers the long <em>"blah, blah, blah..." </em>books<em>. </em>In simplest terms, paraphrase what you have up there into more elaborate sentences. Along with that, take out any unnecessary sentences or phrases in the writing. Try not to run off of topic as well :)
3. Heartfelt Topic
After reading this outstanding piece of word you have presented, I couldn't help but notice how heartfelt your topic was. Your reasoning for the ideas were presented beautifully in each relevant sentence. You put the perspective of your writing in a problematic and realistic way that would have readers understanding you, word by word. Absolutely beautiful and I admire you for that!<em> </em>
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You did a great job on this writing! Just adjust a few things and it will be ready for publishing!☻</h3><h2>Be awesome and have a wonderful day!</h2>
