Curfews have been used effectively in many towns to reduce crime. By having kids return home at a set time, they will also achie
ve better grades in school. High-schoolers who obey their curfew will make our nation stronger by becoming better leaders. Even President Obama agrees, "Education is the key to this country's future." Which revision criterion could be used to improve this excerpt? A. Logic B. Transparency C. Word choice D. Use of support
Logic=a by using statistics, people might be more inclined to agree with you especially if you have more evidence than a quote to back you up. good quote though!
This is the revision criterion that could be used to improve this excerpt. In this text, the author makes the claim that curfews are effective in reducing crime. He also claims that it helps children have better grades and that it makes better leaders. However, he does not support it with logic or evidence. There is not explanation as to why curfews have all these effects. Therefore, the passage is not very logical.
