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Answer:</h3>
Correct formal email:
Hello Dr. Jones,
Many of the students at my school are interested in learning more about improving their health. However, at this time, our school only offers one semester of health class. Our student council decided it would be a good idea to bring in experts, such as you, as part of a lecture series on maintaining physical fitness. If you would like to participate, please contact me within the next month.
Sincerely yours,
Joey
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Explanation:</h3>
First mistake correction: When saying 'hello', you must not use a hyphen (-) or em dash (—
). Instead, you put a comma and then continue with the rest of the email after a line space.
Second mistake correction: When saying the regards, or 'sincerely yours', you can't use a colon (:) after it. You have to, again, use a comma after, go to the next line, and then put in your name. You should preferably use the full name however. You can see what I mean in the corrected email above.
Note: It is recommended to use 'dear' in place of 'hello' in a formal email.
I hope this helps! :)
-Bella
<em>BrainlyBluebell</em>
