Throughout most of this narrative, tension builds in the plot. However, the author fails to establish tension early in the story

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Throughout most of this narrative, tension builds in the plot. However, the author fails to establish tension early in the story

. Rewrite the bold section of this story so that there is tension at the outset of the narrative. HELP ASAP
Buzzzzz . . . Buzzzz . . . Buzzzz. "Mommy, Mommy! Your phone's ringing! Mommy!"

Suddenly, Shonda burst out of sleep. The buzzing was coming from her phone.

"Hand Mommy the phone, baby," said Shonda as she pushed herself up in bed. The simple act of sitting up was getting harder and harder as the baby in her belly grew bigger and bigger.

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IRINA_888 [86] · Answer 1 · 2022-07-04T04:09:20+03:00

Answer:

The tension has been added to the story at the onset (The bolded section).

Shonda was about to eat that special food delicacy when she heard a buzzing sound by someone shouting "Mummy, Mummy". She looked around her but didn't see anyone. She moving the spoon containing the food towards her mouth when she was jolted by "Mommy, Mommy! Your phone's ringing! Mommy!"

Suddenly, Shonda burst out of sleep. The buzzing was coming from her phone.

"Hand Mommy the phone, baby," said Shonda as she pushed herself up in bed. The simple act of sitting up was getting harder and harder as the baby in her belly grew bigger and bigger.

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