Answer:
Explain the situation and aim to resolve it in a calm, peaceful and positive way.
In spite of betraying Guy, Mildred is a character who is sympathetic.
Another suggestion for a thesis:
Though she betrayed Guy, Mildred is quite sympathetic.
Their philosophies are similar. Both movements were born as a reaction to strict traditions, laws and religious rules. They both opposed Calvinism. They both thought that an individual, as well as nature are important. No rules should be obeyed - both movements thought that.
Answer and Explanation:
Original paragraph:
With each passing day I am more astonished, and frightened by the responsibility of a large part of the population in the midst of the pandemic in which we are living. People refuse to wear protective masks and continue to cause crowds as if nothing is happening. And even worse they are putting other people at risk as well as putting themselves. That way we will never be able to, return to the normal life we had before.
What should be revised: It would be more interesting to put phrases that are better structured and more impersonal to give credibility to the text. In addition, it is necessary to organize the connectors between the dependent sentences, as they are positioned with the incorrect punctuation. However, it is necessary to revise the position of the commas.
Revised paragraph:
with each passing day it is possible to perceive more and more people being irresponsible with their own health and with the health of those around them. This is because, these people are unconcerned with the pandemic that is plaguing the whole planet and continue to leave the house without wearing a protective mask and continue causing people to gather. This behavior must be ended immediately, or we will never be able to return to the normal life we had.
