The biggest issue with this is that the first sentence is run-on, you should consider breaking it into smaller sentences, maybe by getting rid of the "and" after describing the mother, replacing it with a period and letting the father get a sentence of his own. Also, you could try "-on how happy the Railway family is. The story also uses detail on how nice the parents are-" something along those lines, just to break the run-on sentence?
This is minor, but at the end "creates a sense of perfection, by describing their house-" the comma before by isn't necessary, and can either be deleted, or you can rephrase like "a sense of perfection. The story does this by describing-"
I hope this helps! <span />
Answer:
C
Explanation: This is the only answer that explains exactly what the essay is about. A and D only talk about one branch, not all three. If you use A or D as a topic sentence the reader will think the essay is only about one branch. B talks about the different names of the federal government , not the branches themselves which may lead the reader to think that the essay is about the different names of the federal government.
Answer:
I don't exactly understand how they wrote the question, but I'll try anyways.
Explanation:
The role of the paragraph represents how women earned their freedom, but they had a few issues along the way.
<em>(</em><em>If</em><em> </em><em>that</em><em> </em><em>isn't</em><em> </em><em>correct</em><em> </em><em>I'm</em><em> </em><em>so</em><em> </em><em>sorry</em><em> </em><em>:</em><em>'</em><em>)</em><em> </em><em> </em><em>)</em>
