This excerpt relates to the plot of "The Inheritors" in the way that it strengthens the conflict by revealing the severity of the punishments that one convicted of spying will face by mentioning specifically what will happen (at most 20 years) if they do something specified in the excerpt, which in this case is spying.
The sick student
or the student
D her destroyed dreams have led to rage and resentment....
Conventions are not an evaluative tool for a writer to use during the revision process.
