Question

Read the introduction to Talya’s speech, which she is preparing to present to her class. When I was younger, I deeply enjoyed attending Tae Kwon Do classes, so I decided to study how learning martial arts affects children. I posed the question: How do children benefit from studying a martial art such as Tae Kwon Do in elementary school? I found that studying martial arts can be useful to young children in many ways. According to one source, “Tae Kwon Do helps children learn discipline and develop a strong work ethic.” In addition, martial arts help children stay active and healthy. How can Talya improve her introduction? 1(by removing the reference to herself) 2 ( by properly citing her source) 3( by adding her research question) 4( by deleting the quotation marks)

Answer 1

Talya can improve her introduction by properly citing her source.
As you can see in the excerpt above, Talya quoted someone, but she didn't cite where she took that quote from. She just said 'according to one source,' which is unacceptable in formal, academic writing. The way she wrote that, it is plagiarism because she didn't state the original author of that quote. So in order to avoid that, and to make her introduction even better, she should cite the original author of that particular sentence.