Olivia should add WHY she wants a health career in a hospital. She mentions that she 'realized she wanted to specialize in health care administration during a summer internship' - but not WHAT happened to make her feel that way.
When giving an elevator pitch, it's always a good idea to add a relevant story - make them relate / care about you a bit more.
Answer:
Waiting in the line for tour, clouds started forming
Explanation:
that's the right grammar I think but it depends to our understanding
I'm not sure how to help you mate, since you didn't include anything that had imagery or mood, but I'll try my best...
Imagery is description basically. For example, when you're writing (or reading) you should be able to imagine exactly what is being described. ie; "Snow White's bright painted cherry lips brushed softly across the firm flesh of the apple."
Mood is how you're emotionally effected by the writing. Music is the best example of mood. For example, during a horror music how there will often be scary violin music? That helps increase the mood/atomosphere or the movie. Same thing with writing.
I hope I helped mate, good luck!~
I can't write the letter for you, however I can give you some tips on how to write a great letter!
- Identify your audience.
- Organize letters to meet your users' needs.
- Start with the main message.
- Letters may need a sympathetic opening.
- After the main message, use an overview sentence.
- Letter headings.
- Use pronouns.
- Choose the right tone for your letters.
