Claim- weak and to oppinionated
Support- informal, gramaticly inaccurate, uses words like "cool" and "Totally", uses evidence from an irrelevant source
Conclusion- not really a conclusion. one sentence is not a conclusion and it doesnt sum up the rest of the argument.
pov- is written in first person when it should be written in third person.
Transitions- no transitions
Answer with Explanation:
Phoenix Jackson was a <em>black woman</em> who was on her way to town on the early morning of December.
<u>Here are the obstacles she faced:</u>
- As she was about to go down the hill, her dress was caught in a bush.
- She also needed to cross a log on the creek so she can get to the other side.
- She also needed to go through a barbed-wire fence and in order to do this, she needed to crawl and creep.
- A black dog came at her after she crossed the swamp. As she hit it with a cane, she was thrown into a ditch.
- She also walked up a tower of steps into the building as she entered it.