Question

Read the sentence below about the Chicago fire of 1871. Schaffer told someone else to strike the wrong alarm box and that caused a miscommunication during the Chicago fire of 1871. Which revision is the best example of adding concrete details? Schaffer told another person in his office to sound the wrong alarm and that caused a big miscommunication during the Chicago fire. Schaffer told his assistant to strike the wrong alarm box and that caused a miscommunication during the massive Chicago fire of 1871. Schaffer mistakenly told his assistant to strike alarm Box 342 instead of the correct box and that caused a miscommunication during a fire in Chicago. Schaffer mistakenly told his assistant to strike alarm Box 342, and as a result, firefighters were directed to an incorrect location during the Chicago fire of 1871.

Answer 1

Schaffer mistakenly told his assistant to strike alarm Box 342, and as a result, firefighters were directed to an incorrect location during the Chicago fire of 1871.

This is the best example of adding concrete details. It specifically says which alarm box Schaffer told his assistant. The original sentence makes it seem as the miscommunication was the big problem. While it was a problem, the fact that the firefighters went to the incorrect location is really the reason the Chicago fire of 1871 was so devastating. Including these details makes the writing much clearer and easier for the reader to follow.

Answer 2

Answer:

Schaffer mistakenly told his assistant to strike alarm Box 342, and as a result, firefighters were directed to an incorrect location during the Chicago fire of 1871.

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