Incomplete question. The two versions of the excerpt read;
Original version:
And though my head felt heavy,
I played on till dusk
Missing flies and pop-ups and grounders
And calling out in desperation things like
“Yours” and “take it,” but doing all right,
Tugging at my cap in just the right way,
Crouching low, my feet set.
“Hum baby” sweetly on my lips.
Adjusted version:
And though my head hurt,
I kept playing
Missing all the balls
And yelling
“Yours” and “take it,”
Adjusting my cap,
Bending down.
Saying “Hum baby.”
<u>Explanation:</u>
By including the statement, <em>"I played on till dusk" </em>the reader is able to sense the story's resolution from the original version. However, the <u>adjusted version cut off some important expressions that show a sense of belonging felt by the speaker.</u>
Hence, the original version gives an added description of the speaker's mood to the reader. For example, after saying, “Hum baby” he added, "sweetly on my lips."
