Lead to confusion or misunderstanding
He is wealthy enough to live in West Egg but not wealthy enough to rent a very nice place.
Nick describes his place as "an eyesore". This detail shows us that the place he's renting is not nice in comparison to the other homes in West Egg. We also know that he must have some wealth in order to afford to pay eighty dollars a month during this time period. From this excerpt, there is no indication that Nick's choice to live in the small house is temporary or that he seems desperate to become part of the elite society. He may be impressed by material wealth because he describes the proximity of the millionaires as "consoling", so option A is also not a good choice.
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A. the dashes Dickinson uses
Hope this helps
It is really a great story so far. What you need to do next is to write what did Ryker and Noelle do when they heard the footsteps above them. Did they investigate or did they leave the house? Since Ryker had already told Noelle that his brother was going to try and murder her, I don't think you should send them directly upstairs to see what or who made the footsteps. You should let the story continue a little more to be more dramatic. Don't let the story be a cliche like others would do. Perhaps, they could hide and wait to see who comes down. They could also catch the brother and then call the police or even the parents. You want the story to be different and have more excite to make the reader be wowed in the end.
