Answer: Yes, it just needs more body!
Explanation: I like the plot line, if you add more excitement to the story via adventures then I’d say you have a nice book going!
The adjectives in the sentence are hot and angry.
This reveal the importance of the past, so we as the reader can understand the things happening in the present. ( so if the answer is not right I tried my best to answer it)
Streaking across the sky was a pattern of lights, it could be a helicopter or an airplane.