Can someone PLEEAASE read over my essay and correct me if anything is wrong??? (This is worth 30 of my points so please answer i

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2 years ago

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2 answers:

Monica [59] · Answer 1 · 2022-06-09T16:55:49+03:00

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Answer:

I think that it looks gud u can always run it over Grammarly to make sure.

Explanation:

ohaa [14] · Answer 2 · 2022-06-09T19:08:08+03:00

Answer:

Explanation:

Page 1:

Try not to use got. So instead of "got selected" use "was selected."

I've read "The Giver" so I know the story, and who Gabriel is, but your reader may not, you don't explain on page 1, and you should.

Page 2:

Lower case "eleven"

Also, "stirrings" aren't the same as being released, or a reason to be released. There is a disconnect there.

Also, it would be nurturer of the baby. You're missing an r.

Page 4:

The baby could not choose between being released or not.

Page 5:

Don't start a sentence with "And" you've done it twice.

You're missing the end, it's cut off. I don't know your grade, but good work.