Question

If I became student council president, I would make significant changes at my school. I would help my fellow students by being the voice of the student body and communicating openly and effectively with the principal, board of education, school faculty and staff, and parents. For example, I would make every effort to represent students' interests on issues such as mobile phones in the classroom, healthy lunch options in the cafeteria, and improved showers and lockers in our gymnasium. In addition, I would focus on organizing more social events for students, including talent shows, sports tournaments, fashion shows, dances with exciting themes, and the battle of the band competitions.

Answer 1

You dont need the and before staff, maybe use cell phones instead of Mobile phones and say usage in the the classroom, for battle of the bands switch the the to an a and put an s after bands competition