In no fewer than three sentences, critique the following paragraph. Explain where it could be improved. Then, in your own words,
rewrite the paragraph to make its writing stronger. Make sure you include a hook, supporting evidence, and a topic sentence. Use correct spelling and grammar. Growing flowers is one of my happiest childhood memories. Gardening offers more than a way for kids to have fun. There are many things to gain from working with plants outside. It is unfortunate that many people feel too busy to garden. More people should take a chance with gardening to see what they can create. I am glad I learned to grow plants when I was a kid
The paragraph is missing a period at the end. Since "Growing flowers is one of my happiest childhood memories." is the topic sentence, then the rest of the paragraph should be supporting THAT statement. The topic sentence is not necessarily a HOOK, more like a regular statement. A good hook would be something including a sound, a question, or using descriptive words.
The amount of data in a multimedia application runs for a few Giga bases and hence storage cost and its processing cost increases. This is one of the disadvantages of using multimedia.
According to the paragraph, LaShawn is a female athlete of gymnastics who has gone through various competitions and is about to face a major tournament.
