This seems fine it just needs to be revised (grammar wise)
Explanation:
Hello Professor,
This is ___, I rewrote the essay and would like to know if I can resubmit it. If not, by any chance can I do some extra credit work to recover my score?
dark brown and curly hair. The evidence is "Mary is a ten year old girl with dark brown curly hair like her father." This shows she inherits brown hair and curly hair from her father.
