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One memorable thing I will always recall with my friends is a road trip to Miami Beach , Florida. I remember being confused, as I didn't believe when my friend Carlos told me that we have to get up at 6:00 a.m., in order to get ready and to go Miami the next the morning. But, just in case, I still packed my clothes. I admit that it was a bit too early for me to function that I was honestly sleepy the entire ride. But I was suddenly awakened with the view Miami gladly offered as soon as we arrived, not to mention the beautiful people you can pretty much see just anywhere. Our trip felt like a holiday rather than running away from the the stress back home. The warm weather in Miami that welcomed us made us want to stay for longer days. But sadly, we need to go back to reality. And that reality also includes getting pulled over by a police on our way to South Beach. Good thing I have a ton of great memories back in Miami to get my mind off of things, I even had an amazing dinner. I guess thinking about happy thoughts really can help you get through the day, just like what they say.

The ride on the way back home is nothing compared to the ride back to Miami, maybe that's the reason why I didn't feel that much energy and all I could think of it a cup of coffee. The warmth of my coffee brought me back to warm and sunny days in Miami that I promised to go back there once I had a chance.

And I could really say that luck was on my side because right after a few days, I had a chance to go back to the exact place that I had a great time. I really fell in love with Miami and it's funny how I always think of going back even when I'm not leaving the place.

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An event that I will always remember special with my friends is taking a road trip to Miami Beach, Florida. When my friend Carlos told me two get up at 6:00 to get ready to go to Miami in the morning, I didn't believe him. But, I packed my clothes just in case. When we made it to Miami we couldn't stop looking at all the beautiful people there. It really felt like a vacation to get away from all the back home stress. It was so cool just to stay in that environment for a couple of days. Our luck was good, but we were pulled over by the police on our way to South Beach. That kind of killed my spirit, but I still kept my composure and we enjoyed a delicious dinner. The next morning I was feeling exhausted, and I really needed a cup of coffee. I always told myself I'd go to Miami. Who knew it would be so soon. It felt good being in Miami for a couple of days, and I fell in love with Miami. I can't wait to go back.

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MY favorite time to look back upon was when I took an extraordinary trip to Miami Beach, Florida. My best friend Carlos rushed into my room at 6:00 in the morning. He told me to pack my bags, but I didn't think much of it considering I was still half asleep. I stumbled into his car, and begin to wake up. Carlos explained everything on the way to Miami. When we finally got there, we both stood there in awe. We took in the scenery and enjoyed ourselves in the four precious days we spent there. We were having the best time when we got pulled over. It killed my spirit a little, but we still enjoyed the rest of our day. We dined at elegant restaurants and five-star diners. The morning we were due to go back home, I woke up exhausted and longing for a cup of coffee. Going to Miami had been something I had wanted to do for a long time, but I didn't expect that was where we were going when Carlos woke me up.  I can't wait to go again.