Question

Feedback? What can I do better? What did I do good on?

Answer 1

I think it’s perfect!

Answer 2

I would say make it a bit longer here’s an idea:
when you long at last get tired

and you’re sucked into your dreams

so many things transpire

then you’re awoken by suns gleams



it’s hard to know what’s real

in an unpredictable world

the skys are gray and teal

and the clouds are big and swirled