Answer:
Cheesy adjectives and add many many unnecessarily fluffy descriptions
Explanation:
All you need to do is maybe replace "felt happy" with "her heart pounded with happiness"/"walked down the school hallway" to "excitedly waltzed down the hallway and into the basking rays of the radiant sun" or something of the such and some dialogue lines in between Denise and her mom.
I think you'll be fine for vivid descriptions and strong imagery as long as you elaborate on Denise's feelings a bit more. I'll give you some bits you can use: "a warm smile", "stomach fluttered", "'I'm proud of the results of my hard work!'"
Anything cheesy should be perfectly enough to satisfy your teacher.
(Apologies that I have not given you a paragraph to copy-paste. Hopefully these pointers can guide you a bit :))
Wanted: he wanted to know where he was and what was happening
But:?
So:?
Then:?
Answer:
part-to-whole relationship: tail:mouse / scale:crocodile
item-category relationship: Monday:weekday / Saturday:weekend
cause-and-effect relationship: cut:bleed / burn:irritate
Explanation:
In an analogy, we find a relationship between different things, something that connects them. Let's analyze the analogies above.
- A mouse is a whole that can be divided into several parts: ears, tails, paws, etc. The same goes for a crocodile: teeth, scales, stomach. Thus, with tail:mouse and scale:crocodile, we have a relationship of part to whole.
- There are different days in a week: Sunday, Monday, Tuesday, etc. Those days can be divided under different categories. Monday, for instance, can be categorized as a weekday. However, Saturday would be categorized under weekend since it is not a weekday. Thus, with Monday:weekday and Saturday:weekend, we have an item-category relationship.
- Finally, if you cut yourself, you will most likely bleed. Bleeding is the effect of being cut. Cutting is the cause of bleeding. The same goes for getting burned (cause) and the skin getting irritated (effect). Thus, with cut:bleed and burn:irritate, the relationship is of cause and effect.
