-Are the words "Transition" and "Conclusion sentence" there because you used it as a guide, you are required to have them, or you need to put one in
-There was a little bit of a lot of word and sentence repeating, I feel like a different word choice could have been used, like synonyms. Like instead of knowledge being used 500 times, awareness or apprehension, understanding, or comprehension could have been used. Just look up synonyms of words you used a bunch of times or for bland (boring) words
- There is some punctuation that could be improved
- Flow is good, with a few choppy parts
- Other than those it is really good
-Let me know if you need anything else, I am more than happy to help
6 times 7 doesn't equal 40, it equals 42. the factors of 42 and 1 and 42, 2 and 21, 3 and 14, etc.
Laura's attempt at trying to use an English idiom reveals that she is eager to try English phrases and expressions.
She says "There's no use trying to drink spilt milk," and even though her use of the idiom is incorrect (it should be - there's no use crying over spilt milk), she still really wants to try and better her English speaking skills, which is always quite commendable.
Happiness. If you live longer but have a worse life it’s not worth it. If you live shorter but have a better life it’s the better option
