Explanation: When I read the word portal it made it sound like a story for a kindergartener instead put "they pushed her out of the flames reach" or something similar to that. Maybe a bit more detail about Fawn and how she lived and why the King came to the forest. Other than that it is a great story.
after dwelled there, capitalize the T in the. after seventh b day, put a comma. a comma after arrived. Capitalize T in they. All she had left was the insignia etched pendant her parents gave her before pushing her through a portal that LAY just outside the forest.
