Question

The paragraph contains several comma splices and fused sentences. Decide if the underlined selection needs to be revised or if it is correct
as is.
While most visitors to Washington, D.C., visit the well-known memorials, including the Washington Monument, the Lincoln and Jefferson
memorials, and the more recent Vietnam Memorial Wall, a beautiful and lesser-known memorial is an environmental park that occupies 7.5
acres, it is the Franklin Delano Roosevelt Memorial. In 1974, Lawrence Halprin was commissioned to design the memorial, he is a respected
environmental designer who has worked on restoration projects and designs in San Francisco, Seattle, and even Jerusalem. The FDR
Memorial has four outdoor galleries, or rooms, that represent his four terms of office, with trees, waterfalls, sculptures, and pools defining
the spaces. The first room represents FDR's first term in the midst of the Great Depression, the second room represents his leadership of
hope through his fireside chats, the third room represents the difficulties and uncertainties of war, the fourth room represents a brief
moment of peace before his death in office. Although Roosevelt himself disliked being seen in his wheelchair, one of the sculptures
represents him in his chair. He was a chain smoker who was often seen with his cigarette holder in hand, none of the sculptures include his
cigarette. However, he would have probably appreciated the sculpture with his beloved dog, Fala.
Which option(s) below would be an acceptable revision of the underlined selection?

Answer 1

Answer:

No need for revision, it's correct as it is.

Explanation:

"While most visitors to Washington, D.C., visit the well-known memorials, including the Washington Monument, the Lincoln and Jefferson memorials, and the more recent Vietnam Memorial Wall, a beautiful and lesser-known memorial"

The underlined sentence "Vietnam Memorial Wall, a beautiful and lesser-known memorial" needs no further revision.