Statements? More info needed to answer.
A-They make it seem as if time within the story has slowed down.
US and the USSR emerged as the two greatest powers for two reasons. Firstly, they had plenty of recourses and manpower, and the industry to use them. Both the US and the USSR had lots of factories, so they could turn their iron, coal, steel, and oil into goods. They could also use these resources to rebuild their Nations, although in the case of the US this was not necessary. This bring me to my second point, they were the only ones left. The British were bankrupt and London was in ruins, at the same time their colonies were diserting them, France was bankrupt as well, and was also losing its colonies. In addition France never had the industry or population of even Britian. Germany was being occupied, so that gets them out of the picture. China was in the middle of a civil war, and did not have very much industry. Japan was in ruins, and was occupied. I would add that despite its problems Japan was able to become a powerhouse. There are other reasons, but it would take to long to write
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I don't find the paragraph to be too wordy at all. I don't understand the entire context of the paragraph, only because I don't know the topic that it is written on. Despite this, I was still able to follow the meaning of the paragraph.
Something that I did notice is that you have one run-on sentence in your paragraph. You wrote "The only thing they solved was why Hope was in that picture, she photobombed a family picture, they gave her the printed version because they deleted the original and didn't want her in it, she cut the family out and wrote on the back, 'Don't go to the subway.'"
Instead, you could reword it into multiple different sentences to make the idea complete. I would recommend you turn this section into: "The only thing they solved was why Hope was in that picture. She photobombed a family picture and they gave her the printed version because they deleted the original one and didn't want her in it. She cut the family out and wrote on the back, 'Don't go to the subway.'"
I hope this helps you! Have a lovely day!
- Mal
