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Ah, Prince Edward Island. The smallest province of Canada and with a very colonial name. Despite it being simply a business trip, my entire family (including my grandmother) were roped into a week long road trip across half a country, our only source of energy being McDonald’s Fillet ’O Fish. Was it worth it? It didn’t feel like it at the time, but maybe now it seems so.
After driving across Quebec and over a bridge to the lonely island, there is one major feature you'll notice about this bit of Canada.

The famous - or perhaps infamous - red sand.

The red sand of P.E.I. is actually an exaggerated red, not the reddish brown you’d expect. It gets its red color from oxidized iron - rust, pretty much. We’d visited a red sand beach, with large grey rocks lining the border between land and deep blue sea. It would’ve been beautiful if not for the biting cold, the dull grey sky, and the wind. But no matter. There were plenty of things to do in the warmer city, right?

We went onto a tour bus one day, and it was rather fun. It did talk about P.E.I. history and culture, but I don’t remember much about it. Most of the time at P.E.I. we were walking around, looking at the little shops and eating seafood. I think we even had lobster one time.

One interesting thing about the citizens of P.E.I. is that most of them loved Anne and the Green Gables (the Green Gables being an actual place on the island). Posters of a new movie adaptation plastered the walls, and paintings of the characters were sold in shops. Perhaps it was just the timing of when we went there, with a brand new movie coming out, or maybe it was just because it is a series based off where they lived. The book was amazing, though, and apparently there is a Netflix adaptation of the series, too. The citizens are nice, though.

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