<span>The correct revision is this: The well-known actress accepted the award.
The word "the" should be capitalized because it is the first word of the sentence. Next, "well known" should be hyphenated because the two are working together to form a single adjective. Finally, a period should come at the end of the sentence.</span>
Answer:
Even though this question is missing the options, after analyzing the revision we can safely say it was made for <u>conciseness</u>.
Explanation:
Conciseness can be simply defined as saying a lot in just a few words. Notice how the original paragraph is much longer than the revised one. The writer gave much more information than what was truly necessary. Details such as "and that new procedures need to be initiated" and "who was sympathetic" are superfluous. The first one adds nothing of value. If the procedures are inadequate, it is quite obvious that new ones need to be initiated. Readers could infer that. The second one is permeated with subjectivity, not only making the paragraph longer, but also stating an opinion that in uncalled for in this context. By eliminating the extra words, the writer made the paragraph concise, using fewer words to express the necessary.
Answer:
Usually when you do a conclusion, you summarize what was said before, and also by making sure your point went through. So I believe the answer is B. If you restate your introduction (in different words) and with good points, then your whole point would get through. Remember, a conclusion is a closing and is the whole summary of the writing so its best to rephrase but have a good point.
Answer:
Among the options given below the correct answer is option B.
Too much comfort and lack of work will make humans weak and unintelligent.
Explanation: Eloi is one of the two fictional post human raced in H. G. Well's The Time Machine. The another one is Morlocks.
According to the story Eloi live a banal life which is consist of comfort and ease on the surface of the earth. On the other hand Morlock live in the underground and work for the Eloi class. Based on the circumstances the Eloi falls into darkness. Eventually they are dissolved and eaten by the Morlocks. Their lazy life and too much comfort led them to this conclusion.
So, the writer H.G. Wells conveyed that warning through the story of Eloi that too much comfort and lack of work will make humans weak and unintelligent.