Question

Read the following passage, which is lacking in vivid description, imagery, and dialogue. Rewrite the passage to include description and dialogue in a way that helps convey a nervous tone.
Passage
My brother Felipe and I walked up to the abandoned house at the end of the street. Felipe opened the gate, and we walked forward. We walked all the way up to the door and knocked, but no one answered. I leaned over the railing and looked in the window, and it was pretty empty in there. Then there was a noise inside the house, and we left.

Answer 1

Read the following passage, which is lacking in vivid description, imagery, and dialogue. Rewrite the passage to include description and dialogue in a way that helps convey a nervous tone.
Passage
My brother Felipe and I walked up to the abandoned house at the end of the street. Felipe opened the gate, and we walked forward. We walked all the way up to the door and knocked, but no one answered. I leaned over the railing and looked in the window, and it was pretty empty in there. Then there was a noise inside the house, and we left.