The biggest issue with this is that the first sentence is run-on, you should consider breaking it into smaller sentences, maybe by getting rid of the "and" after describing the mother, replacing it with a period and letting the father get a sentence of his own. Also, you could try "-on how happy the Railway family is. The story also uses detail on how nice the parents are-" something along those lines, just to break the run-on sentence?
This is minor, but at the end "creates a sense of perfection, by describing their house-" the comma before by isn't necessary, and can either be deleted, or you can rephrase like "a sense of perfection. The story does this by describing-"
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Answer:Critical Writing importance
Critical writing skills. Critical writing is important for school and college students, authors and bloggers. Many people think that critical writing means to include criticism and sarcasm in their writings. But the real definition of critical writing is forming a conclusion on the basis of evidence.
This shows how much Claudius cares about being King and holding onto his throne.
He knows that the public loves Hamlet, which is why he can't just arrest him for the murder of Polonius, he has to be much sneakier and trickier than that, otherwise the public will take Hamlet's side and Claudius will lose support.