Question

Which statement should be revised for a more formal tone? Poseidon, god of the sea, and Athena, goddess of war, fought for the city of Athens. Poseidon threw his spear, which produced the Spring of Acropolis. Amaltheia was kind of like a goat who fed Zeus, which Zeus was really happy about. In fact, he turned the goat’s horn into the horn of plenty. Chronos was the ancient Greek symbol of time. His appearance, a wise old man with a long beard, is similar to a current symbol, Father Time. Sisyphus displeased the gods by disclosing secrets. He found himself forced to roll a heavy stone uphill, only to see it roll back once it reached the peak.

Answer 1

The third sentence. It sounds clumsy.

Answer 2

The sentence that should be revised is "Amaltheia was kind of like a goat who fed Zeus, which Zeus was really happy about." The sentence uses informal language such as kind of like for comparisons, and vague or simple language such as really happy.

An alternative for this sentence could be: Amaltheia was the goat-like deity who fed Zeus as a baby, and of whom he was very fond.