Is this good? i need constructive criticism

1 answer:

8 0

I really like this piece. I enjoyed reading it and your word choice was excellent. There was an eloquent flow between lines, also. The only change I'd make would be the final line. Ending poetry can be difficult, of course. However, the final line is leaving me a little unsatisfied. I'd play around with it some more until you find something that sounds a little better.

Amazing job!!!!!

You might be interested in

Arrange the events in Ivan Ilyich's life, which are described in chapters 1–4 of Leo Tolstoy's The Death of Ivan Ilyich, in chro

vlabodo [156]

The order of events in Ivan Ilyich's life is: (1) Ivan Ilyich graduates from the School of Law and qualifies for the tenth rank of the civil service, (2) Ivan Ilyich is offered the post of examining magistrate in a Russian province, (3) Ivan Ilyich becomes assistant public prosecutor, a position that he serves in for seven years, (4) Ivan Ilyich becomes a public prosecutor and is transferred to another province, and (5) Ivan Ilyich meets Zachar Ivanovich in St. Petersburg and receives a guaranteed appointment in the Department of Justice.

The Death of Ivan Ilyich is a novel written by Leo Tolstoy in 1886. The main character of the book is Ivan Ilyich, a high-court judge that is forced to deal with a terminal illness. Other characters are Ivan Ilyich's wife, Praskovya Fëdorovna Golovin, who does not care about her husband's suffering, and Peter Ivanovich, Ivan's unconditional friend. The Death of Ivan Ilyich is considered one of the masterpieces of world literature.

7 0

3 years ago

Name:

Delvig [45]

Answer: The first hot air balloon flight 19 September 1783

Explanation: The first 'aerostatic' flight in history was an experiment carried out by the Montgolfier brothers at Versailles in 1783. At long last, man could leave the surface of the earth below.

3 0

3 years ago

Which ideas from the excerpt would be most appropriate to include in a summary? Select two options. My singular objective has be

postnew [5]

Answer:

My singular objective has been to change farming practices so workers are respected.
My dreams for change came from watching my parents as I was growing up.

Explanation:

Note, a typical summary statement states the main reasons or points from an action or writeup. In the case of the excerpt, among all the listed options, the two statements above make an appropriate summary;